Post by Lee on Oct 27, 2005 11:22:48 GMT 1
Hi, ;D heres a c.s.i novel i wrote last night, its long but u might like it, plz leave comments on how good, wot i could improve and wot i should do when i write my nxt one, thanx
Enjoy! ;D
C.S.I
2 hot 2 handle?
"Katie!" "Katie!" kate's mum called. Her real name was Kate, and she h8ed being called katie.
"Ok mum, im coming!" Kate screamed, she hurried out of the house onto the metro, stopped off at cesars palace for a drink, then got back on the metro.
Kate got to school at 8.58am, "DAM!" kate said, "What?" her friend Laura asked, "I am late, and i can't talk to u lot" They got into there form room SL1, then out of the blue they heard a rumbling, then a bang...
Grissom was in the tahoe, with nick,sara,catherine and warrick, "What we on?" Sara asked, "420" grissom replied. "great!" sara mutered not telling gris she hated 420's. "well....420 x32" Gris said, "WHAT THE F***!" nick shouted, "fire @ a high school" gris replied.
As they parked the tahoe they all stared at the destruction, the school was a mess... smoldering but still standing {Just} Brass briefed them all, "32 dead, 10 teachers 22 pupils" "Where r the dead bodies then?" Gris asked, "In the school hall"
As they got into the hall sara said "i'll take top floor, can nick come with me?" "Sure" gris answered.
Nick and sara got to the top floor when a fireman ran out, "HELP!!! SURVIVOUR OVER HERE!!" nick & sara's walk changed to a run, then a sprint. Sara radioed for help "364 we need a paramedic in room..." Sara struggled to find the room name when....BOOM! a bomb exploded, everyone down stairs felt it, warrick led gris and cath upstairs. Gris radioed sara "Nick, sara u ok?" No answer then..."Help," sara whispered, as the team got into the class the scene shocked them, Nick had his leg amputated off thanx to a piece of metal, warrick felt for a pulse... Nothing. 10 mins l8er the coroner pronounced Nick as dead. Gris led the team outside and siad "Im sorry but i will have to close this case! "NO!!!" cath shouted "i wonna catch the son of a bitch that did this to nick" Gris sighed then said "F.B.I. rules state that a case where a c.s.i or C.s.i's are at risk the case needs to be closed and handed over to the F.B.I" gris signed a release form.
"Warrick u take sara to the hosital" "no!" sara shouted, "i'm..." "Handing in my resignation form in now"
TO BE CONTINUED.....
R.I.P. NICK STOKES. 2005 what u all think?
Enjoy! ;D
C.S.I
2 hot 2 handle?
"Katie!" "Katie!" kate's mum called. Her real name was Kate, and she h8ed being called katie.
"Ok mum, im coming!" Kate screamed, she hurried out of the house onto the metro, stopped off at cesars palace for a drink, then got back on the metro.
Kate got to school at 8.58am, "DAM!" kate said, "What?" her friend Laura asked, "I am late, and i can't talk to u lot" They got into there form room SL1, then out of the blue they heard a rumbling, then a bang...
Grissom was in the tahoe, with nick,sara,catherine and warrick, "What we on?" Sara asked, "420" grissom replied. "great!" sara mutered not telling gris she hated 420's. "well....420 x32" Gris said, "WHAT THE F***!" nick shouted, "fire @ a high school" gris replied.
As they parked the tahoe they all stared at the destruction, the school was a mess... smoldering but still standing {Just} Brass briefed them all, "32 dead, 10 teachers 22 pupils" "Where r the dead bodies then?" Gris asked, "In the school hall"
As they got into the hall sara said "i'll take top floor, can nick come with me?" "Sure" gris answered.
Nick and sara got to the top floor when a fireman ran out, "HELP!!! SURVIVOUR OVER HERE!!" nick & sara's walk changed to a run, then a sprint. Sara radioed for help "364 we need a paramedic in room..." Sara struggled to find the room name when....BOOM! a bomb exploded, everyone down stairs felt it, warrick led gris and cath upstairs. Gris radioed sara "Nick, sara u ok?" No answer then..."Help," sara whispered, as the team got into the class the scene shocked them, Nick had his leg amputated off thanx to a piece of metal, warrick felt for a pulse... Nothing. 10 mins l8er the coroner pronounced Nick as dead. Gris led the team outside and siad "Im sorry but i will have to close this case! "NO!!!" cath shouted "i wonna catch the son of a bitch that did this to nick" Gris sighed then said "F.B.I. rules state that a case where a c.s.i or C.s.i's are at risk the case needs to be closed and handed over to the F.B.I" gris signed a release form.
"Warrick u take sara to the hosital" "no!" sara shouted, "i'm..." "Handing in my resignation form in now"
TO BE CONTINUED.....
R.I.P. NICK STOKES. 2005 what u all think?
